December 14th, 2010, 4:00 pm

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Reply Scotty6000, December 14th, 2010, 4:00 pm

By far the worst page out the 5 pages for this update. I like the first panel and i kiiinndda like the chicks pose and expression but the creature thing came out hunched over in an un-natural way so the page doesnt look very actiony or dynamic at all D:

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Reply Scotty6000, December 14th, 2010, 4:28 pm

REPLYS To sbdrag: XD yah, I think that was my first intention but I just couldnt get it right and I got frustrated at that point lol I'll try and improve on fight scenes in future comics >=3

To Ashes2steel: Ugh, tell me about. Its just there but nothing more. And I do wanna have good fight scenes in future comics but this was just not a good exapmle of it. XD

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Reply sbdrag, December 14th, 2010, 4:04 pm

The girl is amazing! I think it would be easier to portray action if the shadow thing was swiping at her or something...

Reply ashes2steel, December 17th, 2010, 11:39 pm

Lol I had to zoom out so I could see the page right, before the gradient tone just looked like a bad-res tone file XD

I think the page gets the point across, but does only that. It doesn't seem to go beyond saying "ok, here's a action scene" instead of "Dadum! Here's an ACTION scene!" Really bad way of explaining it, but that's the only metaphor I can think of XD

What I would say might help is maybe adding more of a "twist" into the girl's abdomen, maybe raise her right guarding arm to a bit higher level, maybe her like her chest, to give her more of an urgency. Unless she's not urgent, to which that would make sense. The monster looks like it's kinda calmly waiting for her - maybe raising its shoulders for a more of a "preying" look to give it that "I'mma strike!" flavor. Unless, of course, it's supposed to be looking kinda relaxed, like "I'm a monstah, you can't hurt meh so I'mma take my time~"

Like I said, I'm not as good at this stuff like you, Jorge, or Kenny, so I might be giving really bad advice D: but I hope my ramblings help >3>

Reply ashes2steel, January 5th, 2011, 5:53 pm

Yeah, I know. The comic I had in the first Gaiga was a pathetic attempt at action >3< I understand your pain! But you'll get better, don't worry. Your skills improve at a beastly rate, I have no doubt you'll get to where you want to be.

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